Publisher: Eminent Books 2011
Format: Kindle Edition
So, after I wrote my last review, my husband read it and said I wimped out when it came to scoring it honestly. I disagree (and of course I’m right as always), but I decided that I would really be tough on the next book I reviewed. When I started reading Captivated, it became obvious that I picked the right time to start being more critical. Sorry Ms. Apodaca, but it’s about to get ugly.
Plot: When best friends Mindy and Dean were thirteen, they found Dean’s parents murdered in their home. That night, Dean changed forever. Four years later, they are starting their senior year in high school. Dean still isolates himself from everyone, including Mindy. But, when a mysterious new student, Shane, starts attending their school, everything changes.
From the moment they meet, Shane takes an intense interest in Mindy and at the same time, Dean seems to be watching Mindy’s every move. Mindy’s friend, Markus, witnesses Dean doing something terrible and decides to investigate further. What Markus finds out is too scary to share with anyone.
Review: The first mistake I made with this book is that I judged it by its cover (I think there’s a saying about something like that). I’m addicted to teenage supernatural love stories, so I assumed (I think there’s a saying about that too…) that I would like this book. So, so, so, seriously wrong. I was never captivated by the story, until I was about 85% into it, and then I would say it was barely interesting.
Let me start with the fact that it was so incredibly predictable! Here are some examples, without giving too much away in case someone really wants to read this book, in spite of this review. First, just look at the cover, which is totally neat, but I’m pretty sure everyone can guess what might happen to Mindy. Next, the way they explain Shane’s looks; he was the palest person Mindy had ever seen, he had long silver hair, and his “rows” of teeth were bright white (how many rows of teeth did he have?!). Hmmm, what could he be?! It’s so obvious.
There were so many parts of the story that did not make sense. At the beginning, it’s explained that Dean and Mindy were hanging out close to his house when his parents were killed. Then, towards the end of the story, Dean is reflecting back on the day his parents were killed, and this time they were eating tacos at home and he went to the back yard to get more lemons for his mom. Huh?! I’m confused… (and do people need lemons for tacos?).
The worst part was the incorrect use of words. “One small deer wondered off closer to us, not caring that we were sitting there.” Again, huh? Did they wander closer to you? Or maybe they are really intelligent deer and they were wondering why you were there? And again, “Some strands wondered on her sun kissed face.”. I’m still confused. Bad editing or bad writing? Either way, bad book.
Based on the following criteria:
How much did
I like the heroine: 2. Mindy/ Lina/ Red, whatever the hell her name is, was just annoying. She says she never lies to her best friends or her mom, but that’s pretty much all she does throughout the entire book. She basically drools at the sight of any boy, and I understand she’s a teenage girl with hormones, but geez! Get a grip chick! But what’s awesome about her is that she has super long red hair and she can decide whether or not to be compelled by Shane. You’re confused now right? Now you know how I felt. The. Whole. Time. I. Was. Reading. This!
How much did I like the love interest: 3. Well, there were kind of three. 1) Ayden was the boy that Mindy was kind of dating. His character wasn’t very developed, except just before and after he tried to rape her (which didn’t really seem like a big deal to Mindy, she was more excited to find out who saved her by talking to Ayden to see if he remembered seeing her hero’s face. Dumb). 2) Dean was mysterious, sounds very hot, and protects Mindy. He’s always staring at Mindy, and when he finally does talk to her, he’s even flirtatious. Then, after dating for maybe 3 love-filled days, he ends it with no explanation (seriously, I still don’t understand why). 3) Shane is a… Oops! Sorry I don’t want to ruin it. His purpose in the story is pointless until the end, then it’s still weird.
How believable is the plot: 5. Well, since we all know supernatural creatures are real, it’s totally believable. There is one neat idea concerning what Dean really is, but, once again, the story falls short and is (say it with me) confusing! There was a lot of lost potential with the storyline.
How much did I like the writing style/editing/etc: 1. The writing style was boring, almost like she was trying too hard to make the reader interested in the story. From the beginning, the story was told in Mindy’s voice, then in chapter 26, three chapters from the end, it switches to Dean’s voice. How random. But, the huge problem here was the editing, or should I say lack thereof. Aside from what I mentioned before, the author uses the word eased instead of teased, (am I being too picky now? Nah). On another occasion, the author writes, “On contact with the ground, he did what looked like a roll a professional would do…. He looked like an old man tripping and struggling to get up”. Ok, hmmm, did it look professional or like an old man? I think I understand what she’s trying to say here, but it’s really confusing.
How much did I want to keep reading: 1. I really didn’t want to, but I’ve always had this problem that no matter how horrible a book or movie is, I have to finish it! It must be so I can complain to everyone I know about how awful it was, since I know they all want my opinion (Obvi!).
Final Score: 2/10. Throughout this book it was apparent that the author was more concerned with setting up the story for a sequel than telling it in a complete and satisfying way. There were truly some interesting ideas throughout. Unfortunately, none of them ever lived up to their potential. The end of the story was the icing on the proverbial (bad) cake and summed up only one thing succinctly… How bad this book really was.
It’s Judith! I just have to point out that something about the Captivated cover seems very, very familiar here: a half-faced wide-eyed goth girl with far too much make up. Hhmm, now this reminds me of something…what could it be? What on earth could it be?! Oh that’s right!